Opportunity Knocks

A well written poem with a very truthful meaning behind it that all of us can relate to.

Initially I really didn't like the repetition of words, yet after going through it a second time I found it quite interesting. The "knock" of opportunity, and drawing inspiration from word, as if it was knocking for us right then. Great job.

There's a sound message behind this poem. Why do we always pine for what we want and yet fail to recognise it when it arrives?? Quite ironic really. We can't see the wood for the trees as my mother says.

I found you held a good rhythm throughout the piece, although my only qualm was the overuse of the word "knock." This may be your intention, and if so, apologies. But I felt you were a little restricted. And I found myself predicting the end of each line.

I might've shortened the last stanza so that it fitted in with the rest of the body of the poem, visually. And I wasn't comfortable with the third line in the last stanza. But then I'm a bit fussy! If I may, here's an edited version of the last stanza:

"This world is a place of cold reality and harsh circumstance
But our merciful Lord offers more than one chance
Wise ones will be taught to avoid the dangerous rocks
Time will tell who's taken a chance when opportunity knocks"

Hope you don't mind me having a play around.

Overall, I thought there was a lot of wisdom in this piece and you practice what you preach ;-)

5/5.congrats.
A poem with great depth.Great message for one and all.The stanza:
Many times we wish we could turn back the clock
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For goodness sake we must come with a plan.
Great job.Keep it up.

I loved the message behind your words because they spoke such truth. The flow was just flawlessly and everything fit together nicely. Well done *5/5*