I cant say this piece is perfect, it seems a little plain. But I can say it is a nice idea and that i enjoy the style. Maybe if you used a move varried set of descriptions i would enjoy it more; I mean it just needs something (to me at least. Granted you seem to have many fans so... Im probably just weird)
However I do think this piece has some great potential and I like the way your voice shines and the emotion is unmistakeable.
This poem is just too adorable. Love is a truly amazing thing. I was wondering where you were going with the paper and roses but at the end you explained and it was a very creative idea. Very unique. Tying something all of us to (choosing a flower and picking off the petals trying to figure out if we are loved or not). With your poetic idea.
My favorite stanza was:
In our bed of red roses and paper,
I write you letters on each petal.
Of daydreams and wishes I've had,
and the life we will have together.
Just so sweet.
Darien, I've always loved your love poems. This was good, but I felt it wasn't your best. The overall imagery was good which I liked. The first stanza I thought was a little sloppy compared to the second, just my opinion of course. I also didn't really like the ending, you built the poem up for the driving punch at the end, which I felt you didn't deliver. With a little tweaking here and there, I think this poem can be fantastic. Keep up the good work my friend.