Me, my life, my heart and soul, are incomplete without you,
You're my best friend for eternity; that will always remain true.
Friends were just a game to me, but you have made me see,
Understanding where you stand in my life has also changed me.
Now I've learned about myself, whilst you haven't been here --
Nowhere can I be; if you're not also there.
You're someone very dear to me; I always need you near.
God sent -- you're a gift from up above:
It was Him, showering me with his love.
Really blessed to know you; I'm going to leave you never,
Life brings tears, smiles and memories... but memories last forever.
For funny girl.
Ps. Its an acrostic.
*please rate or comment on the poem, it will be greatly appreciated and i will comment and rate back all round. Thank- you.
Some of the commenter's on this site who do a good job most of the time really surprise me at their naivety of course some poems are rushed as unless you are cold and calculating that is the passion of poetry or perhaps that is me. What a lot of our poets don't do is edit as they have written down what their heart told them to and they are still shutter by it. One should a day or so after go back have another look and edit it. A process this site makes easy to do. This poem is excellent though not perfect it need editing when that is done it will probably be in the weekly competition. 5/5 Ray S
Your title is a bit long, but the absolute truth, memories always remain with us. Its our way of remembering.
'Now I've learnt about myself, whilst you haven't been here --'
`Learnt should probably be learned, I did like the usage of 'whilst' not many poets use that on this site.
'It was him, showering me with his love.'
`I liked showering me with his love, such beautiful words.
'Really blessed to know you; I'm going to leave you never,'
`I think it'd sound better as.. "I'll never leave you.'
'Life brings tears, smiles and memories... tears dry, smile fade, but memories last forever'
`I'm almost certain this is a quote I've heard of before, and its not your original work [that is if I'm correct] so this kind of threw me off a bit.
An alright poem, I think it was a quick rush of feelnig put onto paper that could have had a more smooth flow to it, but a sweet poem to someone that means a lot to you and showed you the meaning of friendship.
I really enjoyed this piece. Friendship is super important to me, so I related well with it. I thought overall you did a nice job. But to spice it up maybe throw in some more eye catching words. I know that always pulls me into a poem. Nice work