Like fire, and hurt, and sin

by Mr Rhee   Oct 19, 2009

The air is cold, and bites at my face.
Each step is a fight, and a goal.
I inhale, and my lungs burn,
like fire, and hurt, and sin.

The sun is, somehow, dimmed.
Shadows, reach, and crawl, slowly.
I open my eyes, and look up,
and still see nothing above me.

The ocean shore, does not roar.
Dark waves do not crash, or spray.
I walk in beach water, that runs thick,
like a dirty, petrid, salty soup.

The mountains, are gray, with rotten snow.
Their majestic perches, have crumbled.
I climb the old rocks, and cut my hands,
and let my blood drip, down, into the cracks.

The trees are not green, or tall, anymore.
Leaves, will not grow, or turn in the fall.
I touch the wood, that is now, turned stone,
like a diamond, with no bright glamor.

The world, is not blue, nor green, nor white.
The sun, moon, and the stars, have no light.
I kneel, and pray, and hope, and cry,
and the empty wind in my ear, is all that comes.

The heart, within my chest, no longer beats.
These sinews, and muscles, do not move.
I lay here, in my grave, and hold my breath,
like time, and space, waiting to begin, again.


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  • 8 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This was such an intense poem. I love the imagery and how dark this is. I feel like you did a onwderful job telling your story. Your stanza were flawlessly crafted and contain some really amazing diction. I'm glad I read this. Nice work dear :) Nik

  • 8 years ago

    by Deana

    An excellent write, so intense , I could feel the hopelessness and the sadness, which is to me a great talent, when you can motivate the reader to feel! very very Well done!

  • 8 years ago

    by Gooberz

    *whistles* i have never seen a descriptvness about a personal nightmare quite like that man. Very Descriptive, i actually saw what you where looking at and felt the sorrow weave in and out of the melodic word flow
    Amazing job

  • 8 years ago

    by cici89

    I got a good image off your poem.. It was well written and had excellent flow throughout the entire poem.. Karl pretty much said it all above. Wonderful job. It kept me hooked throughout the entire thing.. Good job 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I felt this was a very unique poem, although dark and mysterious it wasn't boring or sloppy. The flow was well down and the imagery I felt was perfect. I could invision every word/thought and I could almost feel the pain within the words. Excellent job 5/5