Comments : Our Forever Garden

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was very beautiful, breathtaking. I loved how you took pieces from wedding vows as well as other things like emails and edited some of them to make them your own then sculpted this beautiful poem from those. Brilliant, really loved the ending too... its always interesting and even more romantic to insert a line from another language. Awesome job .

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    A simple yet utterly charming love tale that you have created with some great inspirations. I enjoyed each line that spoke the truth and virtues we should all show to each other.

    A delicate, stunning gem, thank you for sharing.

    God bless you tonight and always!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Ohhhh..that is what love is all about when you
    have that one person who makes you whole
    & makes your world smile..a lovely write
    for your love :)

  • 7 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Tender, loving poem. Constructed with perfect form and originality.
    You have out done yourself with this piece. The man you wrote it for must have a permanent smile.
    Very cool and beautiful poem

  • 7 years ago

    by Su

    Very nice

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Beautiful Sylvia :) Perfect garden of love.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by Angie

    Wow absolutely beautiful... This is what love is all about. A lovely dedication to the one who holds your heart...

  • The imagery in this poem was extremely well-written, it filled my mind with so many pictures and lovely thoughts. Words spoken straight from the heart are often the most beautiful words of all.
    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Beautifullll! I loooove the imagery you've created about this garden of love, which is your life together with the person you love... Amazing poem... Well done!

  • 7 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    This is divinely lovely Sylvia.. I really got immersed into each verse. You made me feel like i was in that garden with my special one..

    Indeed, if i had to choose a place to be in with my special one, this poem of yours already made me decide. This is a lovely write from you. Lovely, very lovely, indeed..

    A 5...Walah

  • 7 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on the front page win Sylvia, very beautifully penned!

  • 7 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    Sometimes too much love in a poem get's on my nuts... Also men write the poems for the women not the other way round. If he reads it, goodbye manhood. Next thing you know you'll ask him to wax his chest. Jesus he was probs having a wank while you thought this little poem up.

    All aside, great poem! 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by simplyshay

    Sylvia ,
    your amazing .
    your poetry both excites me , and inspires me .
    everytime my eyes read your words ,
    they just seem to come to life on the screen .

    thank you for writing ,
    you 've helped me oh so much .

    with love ,
    shay .

  • 7 years ago

    by kelleyana

    This poem is very touching. It pours out words of love. I enjoy each stanza expect the last. I think the english and the french didn't blends well. I think you could restructure the words without changing the meaning.

    "Our forever garden, a place where
    we will dwell for infinity, fulfilling these vows.
    Savoring the sweet fragrance of roses,
    listening to love songs sung by the wind,
    bathing in cool cleansing waters,
    nurturing the love that grows,
    keeping the magic alive in A jamais notre jardin.
    Je t'aime mon cheri".

    I think it could sound better if you use keeping the magic alive in Notre gardin eternelle. ( just a suggestion) overall i enjoy my read, 5/5, kel.

  • 7 years ago

    by anand singh

    A well deserved win for this beautiful and heartwarming piece.
    An enjoyable read.
    Paul...

  • 7 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    A very beautiful, romantic poem you've penned here, Sylvia. It takes me away to a day long ago when I and someone special in my life enjoyed each other's company in such a beautiful garden (at Epcot Center in Florida). Magnificent!

    5/5

  • "Our forever garden, a place where ......
    Dreams can come true & last a lifetime .
    Beautiful Sylvia, simply beautiful ...5/5 ...Jim