Recall and memories of sorrow are so full of tears yet life goes on. I have read so many poems with woe and sadness since I joined this site and this was a good effort but it has not got the bite and anguish needed to make it stand above many that have my excellent. 4/5 a good poem Ray S
To be honest, I can really understand your point of view. One of my good friends from high school committed suicide 5 months ago yesterday. It's a tragic thing. You're poem isn't alluring but the simplicity draws the line of connection between life and death.
I agree, the imagery was great! You took the reader to different places, that was nicely done. I do see a conflicting aspect in the rhythm, right at the last stanza, and it made me somewhat lose the feeling you built so strongly with mere construction. It's a simple matter of making the first line in that stanza longer than the last, just like all of them. All in all, still a 5/5 b/c I definitely felt your emotion!