Lies Untold

Wow this is an amazing piece. Its so short but it says a lot. The end was stunning and the word choice was brilliant. I think this piece is absolutely wonderfully written. Excellent and 5/5

"Silence of the unspoken word
left me breathless by her side
would I be forgiven once
I told her that I lied."

That is the perfect ending to something that starts out so heartfelt and emotion filled. It just really makes you question a lot after you read it and leaves the reader wanting to read more of your fabulous work.

5/5

-Heather

Very creative.
"Leaves danced around my feet
to the music of winter winds
A diamond studded velvet sky
gave chance to make amends."
I always like reading your poems. Very well done as usual, kel.

So....what happened???

;~)

Wow... this was a very visual poem. the rhyme made it flow nice. and the end, was the clincher. after i read it i was like ..."WAIT! what?" then i had to re-read it.

i suppose the most powerful messages are the unspoken ones that you can only learn to understand with experience.

this left me thinking long after i finished reading it. and i love poems or other forms of writing that do that. very thought provoking indeed.

well done. the only thing i have against this poem is that i will be thinking about it for a few days...

~kuro