Comments : Unknown Destination.

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    A sensual poem with a lot of emotion in it. I like the way you wrote this referring to how a train departs and finally ends. Your creativity is really being seen in this poem and I am impressed as usual by your fantastic work you put into your poetry. I could only one day hope to do that. Anyway I really liked all the descriptions and the flow was right on with the poem from the start to finish. I am not a big lover of love poems but this poem was a different approach at the topic and I was taken away by it. Great job and keep writing.

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    I praised britts comment particularly cause she was encouraging you to write more love sensual poems... why ? cause this was a very very sweet piece..with so much passion..

    the words u chose and how u worded it..was extremely passionate..
    I loved the action in you word choice over here!

    plus it was really strong,, VERY COHERENT piece, the ideas flowed so well 2gather .

    You did a great job, and when I reached ur ending lines, I thought like..she did choose the right title indeed!

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Angie

    Congrats on the win!! a very sensual, passionate write... well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow!! I love this poem - it's so well-written! I love the story you've told.. the title of the poem caught my attention.. and I love how you expressed such feelings and how an unknown destination can be so beautiful and wonderful... It made me want to join this train and find this place! I love the creativity behind this poem... I really enjoyed it! You really deserve to win :) Great job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Mmmm I love the passion you can feel as you read this. It is so much more powerful because of the way you blended it in to the overall imagery--instead of blatantly hitting us over the head, its much more subtle and delicious. :)

  • 6 years ago

    by gless

    A great feel of time and rhythm to this poem and beautiful imagery. great work

  • 6 years ago

    by kmx210

    You are amazing. I am going to strive to be just as good as you. I wish i knew you personally. having your insight would prove to be beyond value.

  • 6 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Interesting poem. Nicely worded and it flowed good. Wouldn't change a thing about it. I enjoyed reading it.

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Looking back on this I remember sharing this with a teacher of mine...'
    it was for a challenge if I'm not mistaken?..right...
    We were Reading it...

    And I was like,
    Wait...waiit...'
    was the unknown destination an orgasm O.o...
    And she was like..
    'no need to say it out loud'
    Lmao...

    I remember this..I do,
    Heck I loved it so much I showed it to my teacher as I said already...

    I am amazed at how you turn something that
    would almost always sound 'naughty' into something extremely Classy and beautiful...

    And..ehmm Let me not say what I pictured in my mind...

    :x

    LOVE IT :)
    very...

    THOUGHT...provoking...

    -HUG<3.

  • 6 years ago

    by yogi73

    Very evocative and sexy! wish I were on this train! well done!

  • 5 years ago

    by varun

    Wow! wonderfully written.. really enjoyed reading it..

  • 5 years ago

    by Giegielove Goddess Poet

    Wow .Great Job. Liked!