5 in the morning

by nouriguess   Oct 16, 2011


Please don't let me
down, time.

It should be 2 or 3 am,
perhaps 2:30 for the last coffee
cup was before an hour
and a half and then it was
your last call at 1:03 am, after that

I chewed my coverlids
again
for half an hour, embraced
my knife

no no, if so, then
it must be 4! because cutting
might at least take
2 or...

wait,

have I just heard five
tinkles?

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  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    This reminded me of a woman waiting for her lover to come home, not knowing where he is. Maybe he was 'working' late, or maybe he was out at a bar with friends - knowing last call is at a specific hour and it's much later.

    Of course that's the obvious idea for me lol. I also got this deeper feeling of letting yourself down. Maybe this is just me, and how I'm feeling now.. but that I feel I'm in a limbo in my life - it's too late but it's actually very early (for me it's having kids. I'm getting at that point where if I don't have them soon, I feel I'm behind, that it's too late for me, but then again, I'm really only 24).

    Totally rambling, but thats the story I felt from it. The tempo as discussed before was awesome for me. I really like the speed, you controlled it rather than the reader, which is fun and hard to do. Great write :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I know your poems are your feelings and its up to you which section of the site you feel is right for your poem but to me this poem didn't seem to fit the Miscellaneous section. I read this as more of a love poem and in my opinion I feel it would be better suited in the love section however I am sure someone else will read this poem and disagree with my point of view completely believing it should be put under a different section.

    You see this poem is very diverse and I am sure every reader will interpret it differently. But that diversity is what makes this poem stand out and speak to the reader.

    5/5

    An interesting and thought provoking piece

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    HAHHAHAYES... WAT A tempo...I too craved more

    but it was amazing..it really adds to atmosphere you created of someone who is nervous and jumbled...it was very clear i this piece..I got the weirdest scenario in my mind...
    very lovely !

    Loved it

    S.P ..*you know what that stands for ;)
    mwahha

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Lol, what?
    This ended so fast.. I started reading, then da-da-da-da..DaBOOM: End :'S

    And I didn't want it to end, for this is an amazing piece of art.

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was original Noura,
    though the feelings were portrayed rarw,
    I didn't feel the pain or the heartache and depression I know is there.

    Somehow Noura, I got the impression you just needed to write.

    Love,
    Tara
    xxxx

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