Hello I am the girl that no body likes,
I am the girl, who lives with fright,
I am a girl who has gone throw pain
I am a person filled with shame
I think of myself badly I've done some horrible things
Things I'm not proud of things that bring pain
To my friends and my family to my heart and my soul
I've put myself down and my heart felt so cold
I hated it all but it wouldn't go away
Till the day I let go of all the shame and my pain
That day was the day I met you, you showed me the light and helped me get through...
Jenn, I really liked this and can relate in so many ways, I too am this girl or seem to be unfortunately.
1: I like how you start here with hello as it connects to the reader that bit more (I think) we all make mistakes, have regrets and think we are under everyone when we are filled with darkness but truth is we at loved and though we are filled with pain and shame we are who we are and should change for no one. Though you may have done some bad things it doesn't matter, what matters is you learn from your mistakes.
2: As I said earlier we have all done things we aren't proud of but all that matters is we learn from those mistakes. We have all hurt people whether intentionally or unintentionally but we just need to learn as life is one big learning curve and believe it or not none of us are perfect, far from it in fact.
A sweet ending that shows there is light at the end of every dark tunnel, always a person that can support us and help us through.