This poem is such a peaceful delight- Its creativity has left me speechless.
The first stanza is such a powerful start, it's the smells and comforts of home...the word usage is very refreshing... Very talented writer! I could smell the cucumber while reading...
"tomorrows windstorm" is such an awesome way to describe growing older.... and again the word display of child innocence is just wonderful!
To stay young and feel the freshness of childhood... I felt like this was written for a child hood friend, or sibling... either way... I adored this poem immensely!! Well done Dollwithafrown
Really nice poem that kind-of reminded me of in the film Forest Gump when young Forest and Jenny were like 'peas and carrots' playing by the tree. It portrays innocence and playfulness well, but isn't shallow in that regard: there is a sense of something deeper, a desire to remain this way. There are sad undertones too as you are aware that you probably can't remain this way forever, and the hug is an attempt in a way to store the moment as a memory for the future when times will not be so good or simple. You aren't just describing a set of images but painting a nostalgic type picture that readers can relate to. 'You smell of adventure and dirt,' - One of my favourite lines. Well done
You never fail to portray simplicity, whether it's qua content, diction or tone. I could surely imagine two childhood friends doing this.
"I'm not ready for tomorrow's windstorm."
^ This makes me think, maybe it's about adulthood? You surely must be at a point in life where you're pondering too much about the future. :)
I don't have much to say about this. Not that I can ever utter a lot of words under the spell of YOUR words. Your poetry is just so fresh, honest, and different. Usually we either let the honesty outweigh the freshness/originality, or vice versa, but you always manage to balance it very well. I look forward to reading much more now you're back!