Trapped inside this disturbing silence;
I silently sit and let affliction advance;
Embracing the black vortex of thoughts;
I recall that once this wasn`t what I sought.
And once again despair is kissing me;
Her cold ghostly lips release me of blame;
Her breath was soft, forged from apathy;
Just a taste of this bitter melancholy.
She was too alluring to refuse;
So I took her hand and held her close;
She promised me eternity in this bliss;
I just had to have a taste of the abyss.
The coldness she gave made me numb;
And then It became clear, I realized;
To warmth I shall never again succumb;
As she devoured me, my life was sized.
Now these pale, distorted arms nothing could heal;
In these wounds flows venom which nothing can seal;
Self inflicted torment I've endured seems endless;
Like the nights through which I wandered sleepless.
I've read many pieces on silence and darkness, the moment of alone and how bitter cold it can feel, but I have to say.. this piece here, had me take a new thought process for sure... Loved the lines you crafted... despair kissing- vortex of thoughts... Mercy I love this piece by you... !!
I really loved this poem... I love the touch of sadness and the imagery of sadness you have drawn throughout... the personifications of abstract elements is justified and I loved the tone of this piece... The content is just so filled with gloominess...
Overall A beautiful piece of art(:
5 years ago
Janis, this great. It reads so effortlessly. Fantastic imagery, great first and secondary rhyming, love the emotion and despair.
5 years ago
I swear this must be your best poem to date. I love the imagery and sad atmosphere you have created. You emotions pour forth effortlessly and honestly
in a raw and real way. You have done well my friend!