Now what I admire the most here is your ability to speak to your readers while voicing your thoughts in almost every poem, That aint easy, takes both skill and practice and I personally try to do it as well, but not where near as good.
you've done a spectacular job here chels
and the fact that you ended the poem with a note of despair sent chills down my spine
5/5 and a winner in my book
I'd nominate this if i could.
5 years ago
Nice flow, nice slower pace to reflect the hurt. There is great emotion in this.
It is very precise without any sign of over complicating.
This poem simple but really pure in emotion I love the word choice and the flow was also good very nicely written :)
5 years ago
by Tara Kay
:O WOW Chelsey, I am speechless, this piece completely tore me apart, the language was simple but actually was the best I have read from you, I think it holds so much meaning and that's why I love it so much :)
AMAZING WORK CHELSEY, You are such a great writer, and you make me totally lose my mind when reading your work
The language you used in this piece is so simple and direct and just heartfelt. I loved how you started it by hypothesizing, and the idea of jumping into someones skin; to try and understand how they feel or respond to things, thats just so deep.
Then you you left me SHOCKED in your last verse, where forgiveness step has been taken, and you just waiting not knowing where to go from there.
Ooohhhh Chels, Sigh!
This goes straight to my favs... <3