Sounds like you've experienced a world full of pain Grant, reflected well within your poem.
This is a good write and I enjoyed reading it.
You have a very straightforward way of putting words straight out there, very honest, brutal at times, but so very real and enjoyable.
You work well with words Grant. Keep writing!
P.S. I'm a rhymer too, so not yet a dying breed!
thank you so much for your comments, its always nice to share my meager attempts with others.
my writing came from a need to express my emotions as I dont express myself well vocally.
some are just life experiences.
Hey Ingrid. Long time lass.
yeah i hear you. The pains of which i speak come a broken back and neck a crushed right leg and a bullet through my left pulse that went through the joint. So not to sure a change of diet will help there. But ill look it up anyway. Thank yoi
I really love this poem!
50 years is not old, life is just beginning!!!
Wear your 'life's story' on your face with pride, ok? It makes people interesting.
Take a look at this website to see if you can find something to make your bodily aches diminish: http://nutritionfacts.org/
It changed my professional outlook on food as a weight consultant completely and improved my own health as well:)
Take care and all my best to your wife and children,
3 years ago
by Ben Pickard
As Michael says, Grant, this is a lovely, honest write. As a person who usually writes in rhyme, I love this. I suppose, even though I'm 34, I can relate to the content to some degree too. Life does take its toll when you burn the candle at both ends. Good work.