Kips, this is a very emotional piece by you and I feel the emotion was very raw when you wrote this because it shows throughout.
I like how you tell the story of love, holding out for it and then or unfortunately being lost. The imagery is sad yet beautiful and many of us can relate to losing that special someone.
my eyes ready to let our their tears
There is a slight typo here our should be out I think.
All the best, Em