Comments : For My Big Bro (Kenneth)

  • 4 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Craig - What a wonderful tribute to a big brother!
    As I was reading this, I did tear a little. Thank you.. This was simply stunning . The flow was amazing..

    Just one thing I would change - just a suggestion

    I felt that I was loosing,
    So a smashed you with a stool.

    Could possibly read (Just changing the a to an I )

    I felt that I was loosing,
    So I smashed you with a stool.

    all in all well done :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    Craig, I'm in tears!! Such a beautifully written tribute to your brother! I am so sorry for your loss...I can't even imagine not having my brothers around. Although sad, I couldn't help but find myself smiling with some of the stories told in this piece. Such mischief and fun...gotta love boys, brothers especially lol. Amazing job once again...and much love and peace to you!

    • 4 months ago

      by Tony

      Completely agree. Craig, I had to take a break when I felt tears welling up, I've never lost a sibling but I have lost brothers. Time doesn't heal the wound, just makes it hurt less. Your writing is raw, and relatable.

  • 4 months ago

    by Alec

    I was so engrossed in the story I didn't even notice the rhymes were perfecty imperfect. I love the use of licence in this poem. I'm sorry for your loss.

  • 4 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Thank you all so much for your comments, I am deeply touched.

    As you probably gathered my brother and I had some pretty full on scraps he won most times but not always;-)

    The best way to describe him is as a lovable rogue, like myself he had a passion for motorcycles so it's ironic that he died in a accident, the kid driving was 15.

    I still think of him at times, usually when I do something cool and I thing you would have loved this.

    Regards all

    Craig

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben

    Fella this made me smile massivly :)

    I have two older brothers and we used to knock the crap out of each other (Until I became the biggest and then the tables turned lol)

    Really wonderful poem to read great job as always matey :)

    Ben

    • 4 months ago

      by CJ Maleney

      I was always the smallest but I I terrier syndrome lol

  • 4 months ago

    by Fredy

    I had goosebumps by the end.... what a powerful poem... I love it! Here's to your brother! May his memory carry on

  • 4 months ago

    by Lvi

    This touched me at so many levels.

    Your piece brought forth emotions that were hidden deep down.

    Thank you for sharing.

    • 4 months ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Emotions are always there. You can try to lock em away or sink them to the depths. Locks can be unpicked and it's surprising how many things will eventually float back up.

      I read some things on here that twitch so much that I can't reply as I normally would. So sometimes I reply with a little poem because everyday language fails me.

      Sometimes though! Ya just gotta let stuff float.

      Craig

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This was a touching piece, Craig. My siblings and I are all two years apart by birth and we have a very close bond. Your brother's memory will live on.

  • 4 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    Siblings what would we do without them. Its nice to have them
    around to watch over us, fight with us and do naughty things together
    rather then be a single child and not know what that love is all about.

    A moving write which has good and bad days, fights and laughter
    and the loss of someone who was very dear to you and without realizing
    they just pop into your memory just like that for no reason...touching write,
    take care~

  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Craig firstly I apologise for missing, it is a beautifully? rhymed piece with so much love and raw emotions within it which makes for a really good piece.

    I am truly sorry for your loss and I know they say time heals but I completely disagree, I just feel that we get used to that person not being around but when we think about them it makes things real that they aren't here but memories of them are and they haunt us.

    I love the reminiscing of the piece and the memories as it shows your brother lives on and how close you were to him and it made me smile/laugh because it reminded me of me and my siblings my goodness I can tell some stories but the funniest one is me and my brother were having a pillow fight and he ended up knocking my tooth out lol then we have the emotional part where sadly your brother passes and my heart stopped a little and I had to take a breather as I had a brother (older than me) who was really ill so I never got to meet him and though I have my sisters and brother I often wonder whether life would be different with him here and it sounds daft but it feels as though I'm grieving for someone I never met.

    Anyway no more rambling this is so well done.

    Much love,
    Em

  • 4 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Oh em I totally get it, I flow so much out so fast it must be impossible to keep up, no apology necessary.

    Yeah we too had some spectacular fights. One ended up with me having stitches in my tongue.

    Another ended up with him having a skull x ray, and this is before we hit our teens. Lol

    Yeah I still feel his absence as you will yours but we continue as we must. X