Suicide

by Luvmeluvr   Oct 22, 2004


I was only half awake
~"How many pills did you take?"

I was shaking, I felt sick
~"Quick, grab her arm, I'll grab her wrist."

I could barely even see
~"Come on, Jimilee, stay with me!"

I was walking oh so far
~"Hold her up, I'll get the car.

I was moving toward this place
~Wake her up, just slap her face!"

I was moving toward the light
~"Where's the ER? Make a right!"

I was falling fast asleep
~"She's not walking, grab her feet!"

I was falling toward the floor
~"She's not breathing anymore!"

I committed suicide
~"I'm sorry sir, your wife has died."

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  • 8 years ago

    by Carrotgirl

    Poetry from a different angle, experimentation wonderful

  • 12 years ago

    by Jo

    Hi this poem is realy good, I love the way its short but harsh and it realy makes you think nice one!!!! xx

  • 12 years ago

    by .x.PorteR.x.

    Whhoa that's Awesome! Very well written!

  • 12 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    whoa...amazing....that's awesome...creative imaginative...good job <3 xxxx
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    xxTakeCarexx

  • 12 years ago

    by Mephastophilis

    WOW. This is brilliant. very unique and well written. i have to dissagree with Nefarius, i don't think that line disturbs the flow of the poem at all. tc. xmollyxx