Usually, I don't partake in this story-line poetry, but this was an exception.
My eyes were stinging through it, it was an honorable and heart wrenching piece that portrayed the heros that have earned just the praise you have written through this work. It was so lovely, the way you detailed the feeling through the piece of the images pictured of a frightened child and angel-like hero taking the stand and triumphantly giving his life for the sake of others. These lines just left me heart-felt and emotional
"The little boy understood,
Even at the tender age of four
That his angel had gone back to God
And was knocking at Heaven's door"
i also loved the last line,
...A voice whispered "Don't worry, in heaven we'll meet again"
It creates the aspect of hope and anticipation to gratitude and honor of the reader. Beautiful job, (and this is more praise than it sounds considering I very rarely appreciate this style-poetry, but anyways, beautifully done.)
I'm pretty sure I have to wipe a tear or two away from my eye for this one. This was beautiful. I love how you compared the firefighter to an angel. Its so true. On that day, and every other day, they really are angels. My dad was a firefighter for 25 years and recently retired, and I know how hard he tried to save everyone who needed saving. They're so dedicated to people they don't even know. You portrayed this story, and the complete willingness, and selflessness that firefighters possess. Wonderful poem.
that was so good! it's one thing to write your feelings but that you came up with a story like that and made it sound so great as a poem....i don't think i could, that was really touching keep it up!
Wow, definatly one of your best, I absolutly loved it. Thanks for all the comments on mine, I took them into consideration. I edited my poem, "Dead the Next Morning", I think it sounds a lot better. Take care, I will add you to my favorites too. I love reading your poems. Keep it up,