Darien awww. I love it! And it's not because I thikn your cute. It's because your amazing. The things you do with words... wow it was such a veseral experience I could picture you there. So tell me Is this an abusive amn in your life? I mean there's this guy beating you up... Is it your father? Well, I get the sense that it is and that he's controlling you. You feel trapped by him and as well as your mind you fell confined. Everyone wants you to escape but there's something holding you back. Amazing... The things your capable of is nothing short of genius. Bravo!!!!
Another amazing poem. I just wanted to say that before I read your poems, I thought, "I'll just skim through it and tell him it was a good poem." From the first verse, I was additced. I read it slowly and I savored it. Then I commented and told the truth. Now I have read all of your poems. And I'll check my favorites list daily. I want to read another poem. but there aren't any left. Please write again soon. Stay strong, pretty emo boy.
:o wow, i'm stunned... I really don't know what to say... It's amazing, wonderful, excellent, and so many words... What a great poem... I really feel like I know what your going trough when I read the poem...
Thanx a lot, for commenting on my poem.. Check out some more;);)
I shove u so much! I tell you so many times that ur my angel and i'm gonna say it again. You r the reason i'm still here. Your are my strength and I'm so grateful for you. You're my 'patch'. I love reading ur poems (espeically the ones u wrote for me). They give me so much hope. Please keep writting and I can't wait to see u and don't ever 4get how much I shove you, pillow!
Nicely written. It's so good to see some hope in poems now a days.
I wonder about this line
The pain will never seize.
Even when I'm on my knees
did you mean cease? as it your pain would never end? :S
anyway. good luck with your future, keep writing