Comments : I Won't Die Here

  • 12 years ago

    by Naima

    Darien awww. I love it! And it's not because I thikn your cute. It's because your amazing. The things you do with words... wow it was such a veseral experience I could picture you there. So tell me Is this an abusive amn in your life? I mean there's this guy beating you up... Is it your father? Well, I get the sense that it is and that he's controlling you. You feel trapped by him and as well as your mind you fell confined. Everyone wants you to escape but there's something holding you back. Amazing... The things your capable of is nothing short of genius. Bravo!!!!

  • Flowed Great! Strong Message 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by ºCrimsonTearsº

    Loves it ...Thats all I have to say. You're a brilliant writer and this poem is great. I'll be checkin back for more of your amazing poetry!
    Take care always,
    - Shell.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lyla

    aww that was such a good poem. You are so good at writing! Keep it up and i hope to see some new poems from you soon!

  • 12 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Another brilliant poem! You have such great flow in every poem that you write. Keep writing I look forward to reading every new poem that you post! Take Care! Brooke~

  • 12 years ago

    by paulina.♥

    Another amazing poem. I just wanted to say that before I read your poems, I thought, "I'll just skim through it and tell him it was a good poem." From the first verse, I was additced. I read it slowly and I savored it. Then I commented and told the truth. Now I have read all of your poems. And I'll check my favorites list daily. I want to read another poem. but there aren't any left. Please write again soon. Stay strong, pretty emo boy.

    -Ice

  • 12 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    :o wow, i'm stunned... I really don't know what to say... It's amazing, wonderful, excellent, and so many words... What a great poem... I really feel like I know what your going trough when I read the poem...

    Thanx a lot, for commenting on my poem.. Check out some more;);)

    Still stunned,
    ~Line~

  • this is good keep up the good work!

  • 12 years ago

    by Emily

    Hey, as I promised, I would comment two poems, sorry for the delay. This poem really does describe some painful moments rather well.

  • 12 years ago

    by Tinkerbell

    I shove u so much! I tell you so many times that ur my angel and i'm gonna say it again. You r the reason i'm still here. Your are my strength and I'm so grateful for you. You're my 'patch'. I love reading ur poems (espeically the ones u wrote for me). They give me so much hope. Please keep writting and I can't wait to see u and don't ever 4get how much I shove you, pillow!

  • 12 years ago

    by Alexis

    OMg, that was a great poem, I like it alot. I think you're an awesome writer, so keep writing you're great!!!!!!!!!!

  • Oops I Voted Twice, But I'm In Shock All I Can Say Is "Wow" 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by ~*Ley*~

    Nicely written. It's so good to see some hope in poems now a days.
    I wonder about this line
    The pain will never seize.
    Even when I'm on my knees
    did you mean cease? as it your pain would never end? :S
    anyway. good luck with your future, keep writing
    ~*Freak*~

  • 12 years ago

    by undying blusher

    I love this one...Nice rhyming...it seemed natural, not forced...which is very good...it's great, beginning to end.

    xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Vanessa Lea

    Always hold on...Great work....
    Vanessa
    xoxoxo

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aww this was kinda cute. I really liked the last stanza too, It was a good way to end the poem. And the poem, Well..It was just good! Buuuuuuut, with this stanza;

    I dry my eyes each night.
    This happens after every fight.
    The pain will never seize.
    Even when I'm on my knees.

    Maybe add 'Even when I'm down on my knees.' Cause the syllables seemed weird, Unless it was meant to be like that I dunno. But still an awesome poem. 5/5

    .x.TaLeEe.x.

  • 10 years ago

    by Tamara Thurman

    Loved the poem! great!

  • 10 years ago

    by Crack

    Amazin.

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow. this is actually really good, your rhyming was okay, but your feeling and the hope in your poem was soo... inspiring.
    5/5
    gabriella

  • 10 years ago

    by dawn green

    Wow! great work, loved it!