Atavistic beauty

by Drew Gold   Feb 24, 2006


You\'re a puppet for chanting voices
and heartbroke silence;
your life sits next to you,
suit and tie and vested smile.
it\'s a smile you know
will work, a string attached to show the world
your beautiful worth

in oh so many words

Social last-resorts, this lielike:
\"We went there together and laughed and played with eachother and danced on poles and its only getting better.
We sometimes switch roles
and I\'d do what you want, or say
just the same\";

othertimes
it\'s He, the Trend-setter,
manipulating my character with his
viral idiosyncracies:

Posioned, He speaks a word -
hears an echo from within my throat,
an anomaly... a separateness of individual that jus collapses and once again is too much to bear
\"I jus wanted to be
like you;
it wasn\'t working-
... myself\"

somewhere in the distance
through the trees- not
the forest-
past the lake running like a crack in crystal-glass,
winding through its reflection of a
half-live sky-
through the smoke of the fire we\'ve set to signal our individuality
-- we find a solitary darkness, beckoning to jump from off its page of shadows
and swell
in us, surrounding
something pure, so atavistic that

we don\'t even have to prove it,
even with
anothers devices probing,
illuminating and burning
pierced eyelids open to see the world
like no one\'s judged
ever before

tried to stray away from my usual, i\'d love your comments.. pZ

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lenny

    You did stray away from your usual and yet its so like your others. It also has that sort of blur effect. Cant absorb the blur, head stop spinning. Reading again one moment... Ok, Ok got it. Maybe its not like your other work. I like this style, and reading it twice was definitely a good idea...I should do that more, anyway.. Loved it, wonderful imagery, it built up to a wonderful poem, flow-fantastic, im going to take a stab at its meaning now. It seems like its about either a conscience, someone looking at themselves and understanding themselves, a schitzophrenic, or just a sort of comprehension and understanding of yourself by looking at you and switching yous... And then it turns into a sort of allegory with a message, which would be that we need to settle with ourselves and stop letting other people influence the way we live our lives. Or something along those lines, maybe thats just what it made me think about. anyway great job, each of your pieces....lol by now you can probably finish that sentence!

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    True true, people should just be themselves. Great use of words. Your flow seems to be inconsistant, but that's probably just the style. Keep it up