This is good you have the most elegant and unique imagery in all your poems I cannot fathom how you do it. Nice use of the semi-colons I felt this poem was alot more fluid than some of your other stuff I've read. Simply divine.
"Yet even still he steals
the curved angel wings from your back."
I love this bit...funnily enough it means a great deal to me right now.
You incorrectly used semicolons, but I don't suppose that really matters all that much. As a general rules, semiscolons are used to connect two grammatically complete sentences that share a common message and theme. I liked how you chose two gerunds and connected them to a larger message concerning the pain you're feeling. I think that if I read this poem correctly, it is about the pain of losing a person you love (not necessarily through death, maybe a breakup) and the difficulty of accepting someone new. In any case it was a good poem.
Great poem. Your structure was different... I liked reading a differently structured poems as opposed to reading the traditional style. The idea in the poem is good. You had some amazing lines. Nice work 5/5
This is awsome, it's like delicate, elegant.. i dunno how to explain it... it owns a beautiful sadness that captivated me in some parts very strongly... i didn't like as much the end as i did of the rest of the poem. you've got a talented way of using words, and u're making a good use of it :)
Amazing job with this one! I really love how you interconncet it with nature.. wow! Where do you get this insporation to write like this>This is truely a beautiful. wow this poem made my jaw drop. like wow lol.. great flow. AMAZING choice of words! Im speechless great job!