Comments : Intervention Divine

  • 11 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    This is good you have the most elegant and unique imagery in all your poems I cannot fathom how you do it. Nice use of the semi-colons I felt this poem was alot more fluid than some of your other stuff I've read. Simply divine.

    "Yet even still he steals
    the curved angel wings from your back."

    I love this bit...funnily enough it means a great deal to me right now.

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 11 years ago

    by Sole

    Awesome imagery, I really loved the single words they stood out so beautifully!

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 11 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    You incorrectly used semicolons, but I don't suppose that really matters all that much. As a general rules, semiscolons are used to connect two grammatically complete sentences that share a common message and theme. I liked how you chose two gerunds and connected them to a larger message concerning the pain you're feeling. I think that if I read this poem correctly, it is about the pain of losing a person you love (not necessarily through death, maybe a breakup) and the difficulty of accepting someone new. In any case it was a good poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This poem really blew me away. it is very well written & flows perfectly. you have amazing talent. great job! keep up the good work! 5/5**

  • 11 years ago

    by Brigitte

    This poem is amazing..... It can mean so many different things.... I loved how you compared your emotions to those of your surroundings!

  • 11 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    Great poem. Your structure was different... I liked reading a differently structured poems as opposed to reading the traditional style. The idea in the poem is good. You had some amazing lines. Nice work 5/5

    - Thanks for reading my poem -

    ~ Tina

  • 11 years ago

    by azlan26

    I love all the imagery in this poem, makes a change to actually have a poet who knows how to use it :) Not that I expected much less
    Another great poem :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Pilar

    This is awsome, it's like delicate, elegant.. i dunno how to explain it... it owns a beautiful sadness that captivated me in some parts very strongly... i didn't like as much the end as i did of the rest of the poem. you've got a talented way of using words, and u're making a good use of it :)

    - - - p i l i - - -

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The unique and original style delivered the passion of your pen most eloquantly

    The imagery was outstanding

  • 11 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    You used really good imagery on this one. great.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Wow, its awesome, you are so talented
    keep up the great work
    love Tara-Kay

  • 11 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    WOW...very sad. loved your choice of words. rythm was great nice write

    5/5

    ~GLASS~

  • 11 years ago

    by pseudo

    Amazing job with this one! I really love how you interconncet it with nature.. wow! Where do you get this insporation to write like this>This is truely a beautiful. wow this poem made my jaw drop. like wow lol.. great flow. AMAZING choice of words! Im speechless great job!

    --emotionless.19*

  • 11 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    WOW you have such a unique way of writing!! Your poems really stand out from any others!! Excellent job as always
    5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 11 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    WOW you have such a unique way of writing!! Your poems really stand out from any others!! Excellent job as always
    5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 11 years ago

    by PS

    I def like this. i love the unique imagery and style that you use. i love it. and the words with the semicolons were nice

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    I liked this! It was good!! It had alot of meaning within in, And i liked that! Keep up the great work :P

    luv natalie x0x0x

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    You have a beautiful way of expressing yourself. You can take a topic of sadness and turn it into a thing of beauty. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Awesome, I loved it. You have this style of writting and using imagery that I like. Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dark Kitten

    This was an interesting piece of work. The structure seemed original to me, and it was very refreshing. I liked the use of single words to show vibrant scenes. It was wonderfully done.