Darkness entwined all around her,
When that horrible day occured.
From her cheek, a single tear fell,
As she said her last farewells.
Her hair was no longer silky smooth.
There was no one there to soothe,
Her dying fate she wished to come,
Sooner than it had become.
Her true, passionate love passed away.
And her world turned to black and gray.
With her mourning, she starts to sing.
She concludes her song with a broken wing.
**Hmm...I'm not overly happy with this poem, but it just came off the top of my head. Leave a comment, and tell me what you think. I always return favours. Also, it has a deeper meaning than it may appear to hold. If you're confused, feel free to PM me.**
I don't know, maybe I'm a little tired or something. But I actually understood this poem better then the first one I read of yours. I can see the hidden message behind this one. And yes this is very dark. The rhyming here is a lot better and the picture you painted was perfect. I loved this poem and think that it's one of your best. 5/5