[Like am man and a wife,]
I think it should be "a" not "am"
[But Iam not a man,]
Needs a space between "Iam"
[I like it more when the comment,]
I think it should be "they" not "the"
As a poem, this was not that great. The descriptions, good vocabulary, and flow were really lacking. Add in more details, maybe a rhyme scheme and make sure you have correct grammer and spelling. I did however, find this kind of amusing so maybe you should put it in the humor section. Nice try 3/5
Cute. i think it should be under funny but. lol. i also think the last line should be longer- maybe
They are usually way too lazy. or something like that. i do not think this deserves a 3, so i will up vote it . =]
HAHAHA! I thought it was funny! Real good though! And I know what you mean. I've been posting poems here for a long time and no one has ever bothered reading any =( Well, a few maybe. heehee! Good one!
LOL!!! That was pretty funny=) I think you should totally expand on this poem=D I'm not sure I get the whole tan part, but it sounded funny=) I cant really say anything bad about this because it just seems like something fun to do=) so good job lol=D made me laugh!=D