Comments : Scandal....

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This poem is messed up! But greatly written :) You did a great job on this one babe. I think all you can do is add a little more puncuation here, it confused me:

    Divorce is happening Grandmas left old grandpa,
    Now he drowns his sorrows at the local bar,

    I dunno.. thats like the sadest part in this one... anyways... You had a great rhyme and flow... beautiful.

    Great Poem

    5/5

    P.S. I just posted a new one Bell Hell if you would check out it'd be great... thanks babe!

  • 10 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Haha. I loved it. It was funny, cute, and lovey dovey all at the same time.

    The flow was good for the most part, but then the last stanza was way off with the flow. Again, don't try to force it. It will come naturally. Otherwise, well done. =) 5/5 xox

    Samantha

  • 10 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Hahahaha this was absolutely fabulous! a lot of the poems in here are just silly, but this is true dark comedy here. keep up the good work!

    ~jas~

  • 10 years ago

    by DarkNDangerous

    That was a realy good poem you should see some of mine some time!! ^_^
    ~Sablehuskey~

  • 10 years ago

    by 0AngelEyes0

    This was good...it's sad but true

  • 10 years ago

    by KemistryKia

    Very very funnny
    ;)
    very classic

  • 10 years ago

    by bc

    Aww. i love your poem, 5/5 good job

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    This got a smile out of me.

  • 10 years ago

    by andrea

    Sweet poem

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Ha! This was great... and well oddly enough I can see these things really happening. Made me smile, so you of course get a 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Lol, it's suppose to be funny and in a way--it is, but in an ironic way. You portray some real life situations in an understandable and laughable way.

  • 10 years ago

    by Molly Elizabeth

    Very cute poem... makes you laugh at the same time it makes you feel bad for certain people... and hate others. lol. Very nice!! Love it! Well written too might I add... 5/5