This poem is messed up! But greatly written :) You did a great job on this one babe. I think all you can do is add a little more puncuation here, it confused me:

Divorce is happening Grandmas left old grandpa,
Now he drowns his sorrows at the local bar,

I dunno.. thats like the sadest part in this one... anyways... You had a great rhyme and flow... beautiful.

Great Poem

5/5

P.S. I just posted a new one Bell Hell if you would check out it'd be great... thanks babe!

Haha. I loved it. It was funny, cute, and lovey dovey all at the same time.

The flow was good for the most part, but then the last stanza was way off with the flow. Again, don't try to force it. It will come naturally. Otherwise, well done. =) 5/5 xox

Samantha

Hahahaha this was absolutely fabulous! a lot of the poems in here are just silly, but this is true dark comedy here. keep up the good work!

~jas~

That was a realy good poem you should see some of mine some time!! ^_^
~Sablehuskey~

This was good...it's sad but true

Very very funnny
;)
very classic

Aww. i love your poem, 5/5 good job

This got a smile out of me.

Sweet poem

Ha! This was great... and well oddly enough I can see these things really happening. Made me smile, so you of course get a 5/5

marcella

Lol, it's suppose to be funny and in a way--it is, but in an ironic way. You portray some real life situations in an understandable and laughable way.

Very cute poem... makes you laugh at the same time it makes you feel bad for certain people... and hate others. lol. Very nice!! Love it! Well written too might I add... 5/5