I cant understant, god

by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup   Mar 15, 2007


I don’t understand, god

I cant understand
why you do the things you do,
You take our babies
Take them away

I cant understand
all the pain you put us through
Taking young life’s
Without a clue why

I cant understand
The horror that comes along
With out our babies we are gone

I cant understand god
I don’t know why
You would take such a young lost life

Nessa

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  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Aw. This was a sad poem. I hope you don't take offence to my pickyness. I'm going to copy and paste your poem here and fix minor things.

    I don't understand, God...

    I can't understand
    why you do the things you do;
    You take our babies,
    You take them away.

    I can't understand
    all the pain you put us through,
    Taking young lives
    Without a clue. (or you could reword it?)

    I can't understand
    the horror that comes along,
    Without our babies we are (d?)one...

    I can't understand, God,
    I don't know why,
    You would take such a young lost life(This line is too wordy, shorten it a bit).

    I liked this poem. I liked this message. Best of wishes <3

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This was beautiful, i think you kinda broke the rythm of the poem when you went from four lines to 3, and the poem feels somehow incomplete to me, but the idea was very good, and it is so sad, i think if you just worked on it a bit it would be perfect for what you're talking about.
    luv gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Olga

    Aww, thats good.
    And really sad.
    Thanks for the comment.
    =]

    O.G.

  • 17 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    Very sad, but for all the babies God takes ten times that are taken by abortion. it's very sad. no child should die, all should have the right to live.

    your servant:
    david