I love nature poems and thats why i decided to read this last lol. Anyways i have to say i loved this poem. The begining of the poem you use alliteration straight away, "sun shines smile" i really liked this. It engages the reader. I liked how you dedicated this poem to your brother. Im sure he would of loved to read it. And he'd be very proud of his sis! ;) So its a really sweet read. And for an nature poem very emotional! An amazing read hun. Keep it up! xx
It is so sweet of you to write such a great poem for your brother, i love your comparision through out the poem, great job as always.
keep up the great work, and off course a 5/5 as you really deserve it.
This was a beautifull dedication. I loved it alot and enjoyed it being a nature poem. Im unsure if this is supose to be multiple haikus. If it is the syllable counts off in some parts, if not ignore that lol. Loved this poem. Well done~mel