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by Fsams May 16, 2007
Nature, environment /
The world becomes dark
The sky begins to spark
The clouds start to fight
Sending us sparkling light
Here begins a drizzle
The roofs begin to sizzle
Leaves start to dance
Never to miss the chance
But the drizzle evolves to a heavy rain
Drenching us and leaving us in pain
Making the roads muddy
Aching the insects with fear
The rainy drops splatter
The crickets, frogs flatter
Later it begins to abate
When decided by fate
The wind slowly dwindles blowing
As the rain slowly dwindles flowing
Finally the sun creeps to appear
While the dark rainy clouds disappearWritten by Fsams
I could just imagine it as I read. It's so vivid and alive. I could just feel it.
Beautiful. Great work. Keep it up =)
Wow this is really good, i love your poems there so well writen and they all seem to have so much emotion in them. 5/5
by Jenni Marie
I love the imagery you created in this, I found it to be very vivid and pretty.
The message behind these words is wonderfully portrayed, and the flow is okay throughout.
The only thing I didn't like was the constant use of the word ''the.''
Other than that, beautiful.
by A l y s s a
You have a unique gift. I really enojoyed this poem.
Beautiful poem....the imagery you painted was so vivid and descriptive. Flowed beautifully as well, and overall was an amazing poem. I'll give this one a 5! :)
Keep up the great work!!!!