Hello, Little Girl
by Startle Me May 18, 2007
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The man uses his hawk-like eyes |
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16 years ago
by Boy
Well it was good. just love your poem. 5/5
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16 years agoby Tara Kay
The title does fit, and it was a good poem. I really liked it, it was sad but really honest and truhtful
well done
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16 years ago
Yeah i do think the title fits for this poem. I like this. Its intresting in a weird sort of way. Reading the title i instantly thought about abuse though. Dont know why. Yet its in the love poem section this confused me a little. The next two lines doesnt make the man seem human. This again rel;ates back to the abuse thing. The begining of the secound stanza makes you think, "Aww". Then the younger woman he prefers raises questions over morals and makes you wonder. You talk about a subject thats kinda... different.. A really unique read. Makes you think. I suggest you use a more varied punctuation though. Keep it up! xx
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16 years ago
THe title may not fit a little bit the poem itself is relly good and has a flow so there isn't really anything about it that I would change.. srry but good job and keep up with the work
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16 years ago
You asked me to comment this poem but i already have, i still remember wat i wrote i still love this poem tho!
