Hello, Little Girl

by Startle Me   May 18, 2007


The man uses his hawk-like eyes
Stalking, hunting for his prey.
Hides behind materialistic objects
Knowing actions will cause dismay

He fell in love, unrequited love
A love that should not occur.
And yet he is, and he does,
Younger women he prefers.

It would never work, nor will he force it
A love between the father and offspring.
Would love her better than any lover,
Only daughterly love she would bring to him

For now his daughter will smile at him
As he watches her with hawk-like eyes
Loving his lovely descendant from afar
Thoughts of love and sex he will disguise

**I made this for a contest. Do you think the title fits?**

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  • 10 years ago

    by Boy

    Well it was good. just love your poem. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    The title does fit, and it was a good poem. I really liked it, it was sad but really honest and truhtful
    well done
    xxxxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Yeah i do think the title fits for this poem. I like this. Its intresting in a weird sort of way. Reading the title i instantly thought about abuse though. Dont know why. Yet its in the love poem section this confused me a little. The next two lines doesnt make the man seem human. This again rel;ates back to the abuse thing. The begining of the secound stanza makes you think, "Aww". Then the younger woman he prefers raises questions over morals and makes you wonder. You talk about a subject thats kinda... different.. A really unique read. Makes you think. I suggest you use a more varied punctuation though. Keep it up! xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    THe title may not fit a little bit the poem itself is relly good and has a flow so there isn't really anything about it that I would change.. srry but good job and keep up with the work

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    You asked me to comment this poem but i already have, i still remember wat i wrote i still love this poem tho!

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