Best Mother

by Startle Me   Jun 5, 2007


The seconds go on by forevermore
As they stare at each others' eyes
In love they are with one another.
A feeling both cannot disguise.

Lord would punish the forbidden love.
Their discipline would be inhumane.
Off the chairs they go, ecstasy all around.
Their sweet hunger they cannot abstain.

For they are smitten, mother and son,
They deserve to have the worst trial.
Unfortunately, their love is inevitable;
For their environment is still hostile.

They lived their life in an unsheltered manner;
Face to face with the world cruel and unkind.
Situation enforced them to confide to each other.
As their feelings relaxed and intertwined.

Mother pleases hes son and cries in shame
Knowing hell would be their happy laughter.
Yet they will continue this forbidden love,
Until they reach their happily ever after.

**This is actually one of the few poems that I do that I like.
Does the title say too much?
I want there to be a bit of a mystery left after reading it.

I would appreciate the comment and votes, dearests :]**

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  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenBrit

    Good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cheshire Kat

    I though it was...interesting. i loved how you used the words, and the emotion was nice. I'm sorry, i just find it so odd. But i really liked how you fit it all together and made a story out of it! segoi!

  • 16 years ago

    by Georgi

    HELLO!
    i really liked this!!! it flowed really well, ALSO the words you rhymed were actually really good words!!!!
    My fav stanza was this one...
    "Lord would punish the forbidden love.
    Their discipline would be inhumane.
    Off the chairs they go, ecstasy all around.
    Their sweet hunger they cannot abstain."

    Reall liked that!!!!!!!!!
    WELL DONE
    gave u 5
    Take care
    Geo
    xoxoxoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    I liked the poem... although thought that you could have added more sentuality (sp) to help with the theme of the story.

    Jacs

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The title fits perfectly I would never of guessed this poem was about the love of a mother and son. Another interesting topic from you and lets just say you do have lots of them. Your creativity definitly showed in this amazing piece of poetry. A good read. Well done~mel

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