This poem held such sad emotions written in depth throughout the entire thing. Loved the ending of this it was interesting. The whole poem kept me hooked from start to finish which was enjoyable.

You shouldn't have kept me in darkness
Help me, take me from this loneliness
I am so lonely without you honey
Tell me the reason, let it be any

Definitly my fav stanza well done on writing this it was great.

Keep on writing~mel

I like the ending. You wrote it perfectly.
And as before, the flow was grea too..
Beautiful poem.
I hope there are the other parts.. :)
5/5

Hey thatz one great poem..loads of emotions and really touchy,well very well written,btw if u cud see my poem too destined in my destiny and also comment and let me knw how u found it!!!!!
keep up the gud wrk adios!!!!!!!

Instead you keep telling me
"Forget me, find someone else"
You tell me, how could that be
And how can I love someone else

Wow great Fsams, I would eagerly wait for the next part of it. It is very beautiful and well penned. Keep up the good work 5/5 :)

Fsams
I see this has more to come. I will be waiting for the next part.
Great job!
Take care Cindy

Looking forward to the next part.... It flows well and makes for an easy read. This is very emotional, the reader can feel the pain. Its very hard to move on after loving someone so much, you're expressing it very well within your words.

Fsams this is a great poem with beautiful wordings and flow. Love is sometimes filled with grief and u have it expressed. 5/5

I think like anybody and myself included you've come along way in poetry since you started. I mean our firsts poems are never really any good but then we learn a few tricks andm aster flow and words. I can tell a big difference in quality from your old stuff to new stuff and that's amazing because the old stuff really wasn't that bad. Keep writing man and you'll only get better with time. 5/5 GG23

Oh... cant wait to read the continuation! i like how u express ur feelings in this poet,it has a wonderful structure.sometimes writing poetry help us to express our feelings and cure some pains in our heart! i can also relate some of ur lines,, because most of the time i am so incomplete w/out my love of my life! very nice message to some readers and i hope they can relate as well like me!

keep on writing all what u feel...great one5/5

WOW I love it! Once again I can really relate to it! 5/5! That isn't an easy situation... loving someone and not knowing what happend to change how they feel and I can really relate because it's happend to me before! Nice write!

This one I liked better than the first... I'd have to say a lot of people can relate to this feeling...but stay strong.. ^_^...Another very well written poem... You have talent, keep writing I look forward to seeing more of your work... 5/5

Interesting, it is really good. I can almost feel
like I already miss her too. and I dont even know her. I like it very much

U really have a talent 4 writing poems, i loved this one 2, 5/5 keep it up

Ooh My God . what a excellent piece. it touched my heart. and a tear came from my eyes. what a nice work .

for these poem i realy do not have any comments becasue its just more than comments and everything.

i loved it
My life is incomplete without you
Help me, tell me what should I do
I have a lot to say but if only
You would look & listen to me

realy loved that stanza...
a true feelings. for one second i felt that it was a real story. by the way tell me is it a real stroy of you or just ap oem by private messege.

and this stanza
Instead you keep telling me
"Forget me, find someone else"
You tell me, how could that be
And how can I love someone else

realy relates to me. its reflects my sorrows.

and when you write to be continued..... in the end it made me feel grea aswell becasue i know you will come back with part 3. and i will wait for you . plzl et me know when you will write part three. plzz.. i do not want to miss these kind of poetry..

you deserve 5/5
now take care

bye

your friend
hassan kirmani (forever in love)

Again great poem could do with a little change in wording, the flow of it was kinda interrupted. but once again al in all i enjoyed reading this one as weell and can't wait for part 3...(if this really happened to you i hope the next parts happier)

I lay on bed, thinking about you
Trying to recall what have I done

^^^again these are my favorite lines b/c i know all about that feeling^^^

keep it up

Beautiful poem.
Full of emotions.

" The thing that hurts me most
Is that you left me on the day
We confessed we love each other
And promised to keep tears away "

My favourite stanza.
Great piece of writing.
Take care

Sorry but i already voted for the first part
the 2nd part though i believe is better

I love your poem

You really blew me away with this. It was beautiful. And so Heartfelt. The flow was excellent and your vocabulary quite well.
I wouldn't change a thing.
'You shouldn't have kept me in darkness
Help me, take me from this loneliness
I am so lonely without you honey
Tell me the reason, let it be any'
^My favourite stanza. It's stuck in my head. I keep hearing the words form over and over.
A wonderful job.
Elaine.

P.S sorry it took so long to comment.Pm me like last time when you done Part three. I think there's gonna be a part three. Excellent!

This is really deep. it's full with tons of emotion and it's so sad. i definitely love it.
it flowed really nicely! i cant wait to read the last part. 5/5

~Kristina