This was amazingly penned, and heartbreaking. The begining and middle was strong, but the last stanza didn't have as much power. Excellent work!

Keep writting!

5/5

Mmm. so sad. it seems like anyone who reads this can relate to what you went through.

and honestly, how do you just "forget someone". if i love someone, i always remmeber them. even if i dont wanna.

5/5.

I thought this was better than PArt one, but they are both good. Again you used "some one else" twice in the same stanza but in this one it sounded good.

"My life is incomplete without you
Help me, tell me what should I do
I have a lot to say but if only
You would look & listen to me"

favorite stanza ^^

well deserved, 5/5

I know how you feel on this poem [the laying wondering what you did wrong] i really feel that part good job...

Very good...This one is also pretty deep and also has alot of emotion..

I know what it feels like to have someone say that to you...

Overall 5/5

This is another amazing poem.
the flow is flawless
it really is beautiful and has so much emotion in it
i seriously dont have anything you could change... yay!
"I lay on bed, thinking about you
Trying to recall what have I done
That you wanted me to go away
Forget you and change my way"
^ thats my favorite stanza... that's how i felt a while ago... it's nice to know im not the only one.

great job... 5/5

~Sandra

Honey why can't we live strong
You are hiding, there is something
[[I liked these lines for some reason..]]

Again, though, I didn't feel emotion in this poem and to me that's important. You should put your heart and soul into writing your feelings. Plus, this is a bit cliche. =/.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

Instead you keep telling me
"Forget me, find someone else"
You tell me, how could that be
And how can I love someone else

THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL, it really brought a tear to my eye, so many people can relate to this, so many people understand, but the one person you want, wants someone else, (who probably wont show as much love and concern as you would) Damn, i can go on and on on the topic of love but im going to stop right here. 5/5

Mmmm I think the first 2 stanzas are written the best because they're consistant but after that the rhyming starts to change a bit and rhyming the same word or very close to it for example: That you wanted me to go away
Forget you and change my way
"Forget me, find someone else"
You tell me, how could that be
And how can I love someone else
It takes away the quality of the poem. Other than that I think it's an alright poem so I'll give it a three.

Another good poem but the ending doesnt seem to go with the rest of the poem... anyways poems really cant be judged though so another 5/5

My life is incomplete without you
Help me, tell me what should I do
I have a lot to say but if only
You would look & listen to me
i really liked this stanza i dont know why but i did. you are an amzing writer! this poem is so sad and good of how you can write about this! another 5/5

Omg, i'm loving this poem. it is amazing so far the way you are expressing your idea. great work 5/5 i'm going to read the last one.

You shouldn't have kept me in darkness
Help me, take me from this loneliness
I am so lonely without you honey
Tell me the reason, let it be any

my fave lines ^^

Beautiful like the first part.
Full emotions.

" The thing that hurts me most
Is that you left me on the day
We confessed we love each other
And promised to keep tears away "

My favotite stanza.
Great rhyming.
Loved reading it.
Take care

I really like this. It's very open about the emotions this person feels. Very heartfelt.

I bribed the mod's and voted 6/5. Amazing piece, best I've read today.

Cool! 5/5

Great poem
im wondering what happened to
your relationship
hmm i hope the last one answers the question i pose lol
good job

Keenan

This poem was very good, it had a lot of emotion and i feel almost like i'm missing her too very good

I think this poem is better than its part one..even though that in itself was already great! ^___^ I, personally, loved these lines..
................you keep telling me
"Forget me, find someone else"
You tell me, how could that be

but i have a question, is this the same instance as its part one? cause there the reason was 'someone else', but here, there is 'n0 reason'..hehe
still, this is great! 5/5 of course..^_^

Wow. i can relate to this poem. I so sorry! great poem i again love the emotion!