Excellent dude, the poem is 99.9% poetic and the wordings are great. The caption and the content is cohesive and the lexis used is coherent. Great write with mournful feelings depicted. I would just suggest you to shorten the 20th sentence. 5/5 all the way
This type of poem where the writer blames himself is always so well written yet so sad. Sadness like this arises from giving others the power to conduct how we feel...usually the only mistake we make. A good read.
Hm. Not bad.
I like the emotion emitting from it; I could actually feel what you might have, which is good.
And I love the repition of "Here I go..one more time."
Usually I wouldn't, but it really fits in this poem; nicely done. =]