A Phrase of Praise.

Michael, I thought I would go 'old school' and 'check out' one you had 'dropped'....okay, i'll stop with the 'hip'...no really, I will stop now.

One from your rhyming days and a little gem at that. Nothing like true love, is there?

Take care, Michael.

Michael this is truly beautiful and alot better than the piece of mine that's similar, you write so elegantly.

All the words, the rhythm and fast pace go with the theme of the poem. I like the short, sharp lines because it's like the wind is actually twirling your words around to this Kim who isn't near by but still hears your message and infact awakens to it. Now wouldn't it be beautiful if we could just kiss into the wind or whisper our sweet nothings into it for the person to hear the words or feel the kiss, magic :)

All the best, Em

OOPS -
and to finish it off..

A great piece.. beautiful and full of imagery.

5/5.

"Swirling and curling like
Smoke from a pipe.
Up-lifting and drifting,
into leaves, fresh and bright."
`Great wording, the simile at the beginning really started the poem off well and had me interested immediatly. I can imagine someone twirling with the leaves that fall, they are happy..

"Orating, escaping,
Now free
with the birds.
A phrase of praise,
freed to be heard."
`You describe this very well, the word choice is flawless.. everything written very well.. "A phrase of praise freed to be heart." Loved how the title was inserted into this piece in a interesting way.

"Racing, quick-pacing,
upon the morn breeze.
A visionary mission;
only wishing to please"
`Wow Darcy.. your flow and consistant rhyme is great.. thats quite impressive to have the talent of being able to rhyme and have your flow be so flawless.. youve done so very well with this. Its beautiful the way the words are spoken in this piece.

"Prancing, advancing,
Words wind with the wind.
Towards - post aboard,
destination, my Kim."
`Oh, how cute. However, "words wind with the wind" - I didnt like that. wind and wind, maybe you meant wirl in the wind or wirl with the wind? I love how your destination is your love - perhaps.. your words speak such beauty!

"My cutie, my beauty,
sleeping safe and sound.
Through the window,
my words go.
My babe, they have found."
`Your ability to write like this amazes me beyond words. Another great stanza, smooth transitions from one stanza to the next.

"Words caress with finesse
to your unconscious mind.
Enveloping - developing;
sincerely defined."
`Wonderful.. your rhyming is def. not rushed.. and your word choice is phenomonal.. impressive.

"You utter a mutter
Now you have awoken
A timely reply
To the words
I had spoken."
`I really dont like how words is repeated so much in this poem, find a unique way to say it instead of being so repetitive with one word.. otherwise this poem holds great imagery.. its beautiful.<3

"Resounding, surrounding
my emotions for you.
A meaning
True feeling,
~ I Love You ~"
`Adorable ending, MIchael. You finally reach her and she awakes from her sleep, and the meaning and feeling of true love can be felt, and I love you is spoken.

Ditto to TJ's comments and the others. There is tenderness and a softness to yours words. I hope some day that I can achieve the flow that seems to come naturally to you. Excellent from me.