Wolf wolf wolf

Ooo this was a cute little poem. :)

I felt there should have been more structure in punctuation. If you use periods and semi colons and all that then pay attention to capitalization and also note when there is a period needed.

I felt the rhyming was consistent which made it an easy read. Overall it was a cute little poem. Four out of five.

Reminds me of my favourite book; twilight

"Pretty as a bee,
lonely as a sea..."

I like how you said what the wolf was like there...
I would change it to the sea, just sounds better......

"stalks his prey within the night
searching for something to chew and bite.
sounds so fierce, growls so loud;
stands up so big and proud."

Good job with describing the wolf and the way he sounds......

"wolf wolf wolf, come to me,
help me be who i want to be."

Great ending, you really have great potential as Luanne said. Really your poems are about flawless!

Pretty as a bee,
lonely as a sea.
he stalks his prey within the night
looking for something to chew and bite.
sounds so fierce, growls so loud;
stands up so big and proud.
wolf wolf wolf, come to me,
help me be who i want to be.
^^^
I really like this one. It has imagery fierce yet calm .... lonely yet proud.

A few minor changes I would make ....

Pretty as a bee,
lonely as the sea...
stalks his prey within the night
searching for something to chew and bite.
sounds so fierce, growls so loud;
stands up so big and proud.
wolf wolf wolf, come to me,
help me be who, i want to be.

In the third line you have his so you really don't need he ....
Looking ---> searching in 4th line

I think you have great potential as a writer Diana. I will do more tomorrow hun.

Luanne