Intellect: A Forbidden Fruit

Very good:
on the second line, perhaps you should say:
'both a separate entity', otherwise 'entity' needs to be 'entities'
'Were both ego and ambition', there's just something wrong with that line, perhaps the use of 'were', and the last thing is 'Desiring for happiness' perhaps just 'Desiring happiness?'
Once again, another really good poem from you...you've definitely got something. You think pretty deeply and have a good head on your shoulders...I still look forward to more!

The above comment has not come out well so I am repeating it since it cannot be erased.
It should be read like this:
ther are many poetic features which are precipitated in your writing:
The piquant vocabulary reveals the poetic taste..
the monologue states the variance of two States
1. The animal as born crude
2. the intellect emerging out of the consumptions of the forbidden fruit.
The biblical imagery is great and symbolic too.
The goal of life is what we acquire by our learning or through the natural instincts.
The reference to Lucifer as Satan brings the Eden garden imagery before our eyes.
Well penned.. I loved reading it
Keep it up vaibhav

There are many poetic features which are precipitated in your writing…
the piquant vocabulary reveals your poetic taste..
the monologue states the variance of two states, that is being animal as born crude and the other the intellect emerging out of the consumption of the forbidden fruit…
The Biblical imagery is great as it is symbolic too…
The goal of life again is what we acquire by our learning or through the natural instincts…
The reference of Lucifer as satan brings the Eden garden scene before our eyes…
Well penned….I loved reading it.. Keep it up Vaibhav…