What We Have

I love reading this poem
and it is amazing
very well done =)
5/5

Another beautiful write...
so many people could relate to it..

"We hang, We're cool
Girls just being girls
Fingernails, Chick flicks, Prank calls
That's totally me and you
Never take it for granted"

^^ very well described..

'graanted' in the second stanza should be granted.

Overall, I liked this poem more than the other one I've read from you.

I'll start with the critic: I think that you should revise the whole poem and add punctuation signs on some places that would make the flow better and more effective. Also, I didn't like the repetition of the 'Never take it for granted' because it didn't fit the flow of the whole piece. I think (don't want to offend you, personal opinion only) that repetitive lines should be more powerful and this was quite simple.

I like the fact that many people can relate to this piece yet it don't sound forced at all- it is sincere and personal, filled with emotions expressed in a really good way. Your descriptions are interesting and this piece brought the smile to my face. Whole poem holds great beauty and positivity.

You have such a good meaning to this. not to take your friends or anybody for granted for they might be gone tomorow.. not sure if i really liked the flow, but its good!
Aly

Thanks you for commenting on my poem I can use all the feedback I can get!