Lonely tree & lonely me

by Freedom   Apr 20, 2008


Lonely tree whispering in front of my window
Leaves are falling all on the ground
You stood there once;you took a look around
You look to places which surrounds.

What hapened later?sky turned black
Forbidding thunder had attack
You smiled to me like nothing's wrong
Why didn't tell that time?Your love was gone.

This pillow..i still remember
You slept on it,it was november...
I watched you sleeping all the time
I trully knew that you were mine.

I still remember everything of you
You telling to forget,but this is hard to do
I tell you last time,please listen clearly
I love you much,remember,dear..

Lonely tree whispering in front of my window
Leaves are falling all on the ground
I stand now here.My heart has wound
I take a look..and you're not around.

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I must overcome it.

2008.04.21 (C) Freedom

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  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    The overall write was well done. This piece was a little rocky here and there, but nothing too bad. The flow as ok, and the structure was good besides the last big gap between the last stanza. The imageray was there and was pretty vivid. Great write, keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by Biya

    Its a good poem freedom
    a vote for u :)
    cheers
    Biya

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Very touching and sad.
    this poem contains sorrow and pain which the writer still suffer from it.

    "This pillow..i still remember
    You slept on it,it was november...
    I watched you sleeping all the time
    I trully knew that you were mine."

    these lines touched my heart deep

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is really good work. well done and keep it up xx

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