Between Mother Earth And Father Sky

by debbylyn   Apr 22, 2008


Dear Mother, your bounties we disdain
Decapitated mountains, clouds of acid rain
Beauty at our fingertips, scars upon thy womb
River veins polluted, concrete urban tombs

Dear Father, your heavens we despise
Crystal blue horizon, smoke filled putrid sky
Clear winds aloft breathe life to us all
Niagra tear torrents, we rush to the falls

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  • 15 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    This is such a stunning piece of work, I am completely short of words.

    there's truth, there's poetry and there's so much pain in the words you have strung. Amazing, Debbylyn!

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    Once again you have penned a brilliant piece. I would expect nothing less from you. The imagery is awesome as are your word choices.

    Dear Mother, your bounties we disdain
    Decapitated mountains, clouds of acid rain
    Beauty at our fingertips, scars upon thy womb
    River veins polluted, concrete urban tombs

    This paints such a vivid and sad picture for the mind. Of what is being done to our beautiful Earth.

    Dear Father, your heavens we despise
    Crystal blue horizon, smoke filled putrid sky
    Clear winds aloft breathe life to us all
    Niagra tear torrents, we rush to the falls

    Wow. Excellent job Deb and a perfect piece for Earth Day :)
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by Lu

    Debbie
    You've penned a piece here that is a call to wake up the world and see that the beauty we have is being stripped inch by inch. Wonderfully penned message my friend. Deep and impacting to the heart.

    Luanne

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    So much beauty in your words dear Deb!
    You never cease to amaze me:)

    Hugs,

    Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, Debbylyn...

    I am in awe, truly speechless. I can't find right words to express what I felt when I was reading this piece. The message that you conveyed is so meaningful. I've never read a poem like this one in the nature section and this is truly original and effective in so many ways. I wish it was longer because I enjoyed in every brilliant line.
    I like the details and descriptions in each stanza, I think that you did great job with them. Also, the choice of words is excellent and every word seem perfectly picked. I read this poem twice but I can't find anything to critique here. I love your writing style and this poem brings out the truth about this world excellently, it is so deep.
    Overall, amazingly done.
    Keep up!