This poem was good. You put some emotion in it and thats what makes a good poem.

Hi.. at 12 you are very good... this is very touching...

"Whenever I remember
Counting those car colors,
I regret I never got
To say how much I love you."

^^ so touching... there are times when we are not able to tell our loved ones how much we care for them untill its too late...

very good...
keep writing..

It was pretty good and it showed the emotions which does make a great poem, but I think it could have been just a little longer and the ending needs a little work too.

Overall though it was a nice write and I gave it a 5/5

Beautiful, i love most the memories flash and the feeling that hide behind this words ,like it come from the heart ,well done and keep write.

I think you need to add more emotion to this poem, it just seems like your reminiscing but there aren't any feelings that go along with the memories.

Also, I think that you could work on the consistency of the lines in your stanzas. I'm not saying you have to, but I think that it would be easier to read if you made your stanzas all the same length.

Other than that it was pretty good. Nice job.

Awww this is a abeautiful poem hun keep it up xxx

Awww....I love this! I think you express your feelings well and this poem was so good! I liked how you said you watched the cars go by and you would count the colors, that's really sweet. It really shows the good times you had with him and I admire how you made this poem so truthful and from your heart. Keep writing, and god bless! :)

This is a good poem. Keep up the good work. You showed your emotions in it and that made it even better.

This well written poem is a very fine tribute to your grandfather

The flow is very nice

Your only 12!
good poem, so deep
im very sorry for your loss
good poem

Aww... such an innocent poem... very sweet... loved this dedication of yours... At 12 you r very good i must say...

the first part is lovely... counting the car color.. the swing... lovely description...

from the latter part I can feel how much you miss your great granpa...

wonderful write...

keep writing..

Wow for a twelve year old yo got talent. I loved the last 2 verses. even though your twelve however i wont let you off so easy MAUHAHAHAAHHAH. The first half of the poem didnt really catch my eye, your word choice was kinda not original and format not too organized but plz dont take any offense i did like it ^^

Extemely amazing. You expressed everything extremely well. The description and how vivedly you remember everything was great. Great work, nice poet you are. :) 12 is pretty young, but I must say you've got talent. 5/5.

Now this piece was definitly much better with emotions. You expressed them beautifully into this poem. And out of the two piece of yours I have read this is definitly the better one.

Like Auzy [The Tasteless] Said your young. Soon you will learn metaphors which will flow through you creating such lovely and unique pieces. You've just got to keep at it. Don't give up on writing. You can acheive anything as long as you put your mind to it. Like I said before stronger and powerful words would of made this more appealing but you still did a good job.

This is an impressive piece for your age. Well done.

Awww.. that was sad. It made me think of my grandfather. I agree that's it's not the best poem in the world technically, but it's sentimental to you, so I think it's great. It's hard to lose someone you love, but you still have memories to hold close to your heart. They're still a part of your life, just not physically. Just stay strong and hang in there, he'll always be in your heart!

Keep writing!
Cayce

WOW!! you are only 12 and wrote this!! And you don't think it's one of your best. I think this is amazing. Maybe because It really relates to me. This is the first I have read of yours, but I can't wait to read more because this poem really touched my heart.

I miss you,
I love you,
Goodbye,
They say it's not forever,
But still it seems so long,
I never knew what you meant to me
until you were gone.

This stanza really touches me because it is so true with my Great uncle who passed away last year.

Really Amazing :)