Vicious Cycles

by Italian Stallion   May 13, 2008


Sitting, listening, watching still,
Movements caressing daylights will.
Subdued haze lingering through,
Sighting mountains crisp air dew.

Eagles soaring dipping low,
Scoping victims down below.
Traveling rapidly engaging upon,
Helplessly wondering baby swans.

Cycles evolve round vicious games,
Food chain develops extending regular flames.
Survival amongst death, food amongst starvation,
Here lies animals creation, no negotiation.

© Copyright 2008 By: Italian Stallion

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  • 13 years ago

    by Brittany C

    This is a very true poem. The food chain and life cycle can be very vicious. It can also be compared to humans but I wont go into that. The flow, wording, format and rhyming were all very good. Plus it is easy to understand. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really enjoyed this poem Joe. The meaning behind this piece was outstanding, The way you portrayed survival in the wild all under such a natural sense was stunning. The way I read this piece what that it was a metaphor for todays society. It seemed as though you were describing how different "classes" so to say through life are treated. The more powerful the class [Eagles] the higher up they are. The less powerful [Sawns] the lower they are. It's almost like being tormented. That's just my interpretation anyway.

    The rhyme and flow of this piece was superb, Not once did it lose it's flow or go off track, I admire that within this poem. The rhyme didn't seem forced, it all came together quite nicely. Your word choice vivid and truely outstanding. I liked the fact that the simplicity created a nice effect over the atmoshpere.

    I liked the fact that within each stanza you revealed a little something more about the topic. The first stanza held a nature feel, whilst the second was about animals in a predator world and the third revealed survival. As I came along reading I had an idea what this poem was about yet you never made it obvious til the ending stanza. That was a great effect.

    Cycles evolve round vicious games,
    Food chain develops extending regular flames.
    Survival amongst death, food amongst starvation,
    Here lies animals creation, no negotiation.

    The stanza above was facinating. It truely caught my interesting. I liked the inner rhyme within the last line. It held such a rhythm.

    Overall this was a wonderful piece was expressed a truthful and meaningful topic.
    Well done. ~Mel