The Night without you

This was a beautiful and well written poem. i like your writing. 5/5

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Wow, that was a very heartfelt poem. I liked it a lot. You wrote it so beautifully.

I can actualy feel it
wow this poemis really amazin

keep it up :)

I really do like this poem. I have a few suggestions though:

1. Take out all the unnecessary I's
2. Remove punctuation
3. Remove filler words
4. tweak your grammar just a bit

I have played around with it a bit:

Walking alone the lonely roads
Searching your whispers,
And soft touches of your hands

Missing your sweet smile
Seeing you far from my shadow
Complaining to myself

As darkness chased my way
In the blanket of midnight
It was hard to search my final stay

Tried to hide those blames (this line doesn't make sense)
Fighting with time
Cold sounds took place on warm wishes

Thinking about few hours ago
Reflecting your face under the moonlight
that was the night without you

I hope you are not offended. I like the poem, I just think with a few tweaks, it would read much better.

Hassan
Your pain and lonliness can be felt in your words. Very sad and heartfelt piece.

I tried to hide those blames;
I was fighting with time,
Cold sounds took place on warm wishes.

I loved these lines they really had an impact on me.
Great job!
Take Care Cindy