The Lid Of Doom

by ADEL   Jun 10, 2008


Though I am the mine

Of rum and wine

My sun is thirsty

And longs to shine

Though I am the knight

Of rays and shades

My noon is night

And longs to light

Though I am the eagle

Of haze and sky

My birds are crippled

And long to fly

Though I am the depth

Of sunset and dawn

My night is floating

And longs to drown

Though I am the roots

Of spring and dew

My rose is nodding

And longs to grow

Though I am a desert

Tied up with sand

My thirst is flown

And longs to land

Though I am a rock

Flung with stones

My strength is weak

In lack of bones

For I am a draft

Burnt and cold

My poem is spread

And longs to fold

( C ) Copyright 2008 ADEL ATTIYEH

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  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    You are a exceptional poet and we know that. I really can't play any critique here. Just want to say I'm amazed by your writing. Your imagery and creative piece of writing both are too good. Thanks a lot for sharing!

  • 15 years ago

    by ThE CrOw

    Wow that is really good i loved it the choice of words it seems so real ..keep up the writing you have a talent !!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    I think U created a new description of sadness and how it turns everything into the contrast ...
    Besides that ur expressions were Original like
    (My sun is thirsty and longs to shine,My noon is night and longs to light,My rose is nodding and longs to grow...etc)...
    And ur choice of words and its usage were perfect...I liked that u used the word ( My) before sun,night,birds....It showed that u live in ur own world and that world is deformed by sadness and darkness....
    The flow also has a great influence on the poem..
    I really liked it so much...
    Great work,plz keep it up:)..

  • 15 years ago

    by karin

    So nice... keep writing :-)

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Wow Adel, this is so nice to see you posting again, its been a long time but i could still feel the same magic and could still get the same shiver while reading your poems.
    I am really glad to have you in our club and its surely our priveldge.

    Loved the poem and loved the feelings that it raises deep within.

    Keep writing dear friend

    all the best and take care

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