Glass-Drawn Words

by BrokenREALiTy   Jun 11, 2008


[Malfunction] -- doting eyes invade transparent thoughts,
like water seeping through the finest technology.
Static tongues and overheated screens,
disperse within the twisted wires of humility.

[Perfection] -- slaughtered storms bathe the fallen leaves;
as hordes of maelstroms destroy eccentricity.
Tinted tears escape these forlorn skies,
sketched by achromatic prophecies.

[Corruption] -- deceitful banter blend within a swaying pulse,
as synthetic passions dribble through these agile lips.
A thousand moons conceal erratic scars,
laced upon a lover's virgin fingertips.

©20080610 Mindy Huang

** I did switch the last two stanzas with each other; I can't really decide whether it was better before, or now, but I find a better interpretation this way.
*** I wrote this while staring at a microwave (: According to my sister, I have no life.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    Well, i loved this piece of work! it was wisely written. yer a very detailed writer. and the title i can understand plus it's very eye catching! keep up the wonderful work!

  • 15 years ago

    by Kaila

    I really enjoyed the randomness of this poem. I usually don't post mine because, like you said I don't want all the bull critisism. But the vocabulary in this poem was so lovely it made me smile. And the simile in the first stanza was amazing! It created somewhat of a vivid picture in my head. nice job! keep it up
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Actually i liked it, it was like a dictionary however a dictionary of poetic words. Your title makes perfect sense for this poem as well. The three words you picked entwined. No its not your best, but most definately an original and i liked it.

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