Got Me Suicidal

by Alejandro Parada   Jul 8, 2008


You've become a part of me
that without i feel like i cant breathe
what can i do your gone
sing and dedicate a song

either way i guess you've made your choice
to 4get about me and just stop hearing ma voice
u don't even talk no more and i still have
a huge hole in ma heart or maybe a stab

what can i say I'm hurt dead internally
just to think about u externally
going to another man
but do u remember how this all began

two people flirting like there was no tomorrow
i don't believe in love at first sight though
with u i was caught instantly without doubt
i felt like i was knocked out

gone to heaven and seen ma soul mate
and that was something in which we relate
but know your gone to another man already
saying u 4got about me but u still have that teddy

the one i said give back wen you've 4gotten about us
while I'm lien confused and I'm a mess
but i don't wanna let u know ma feelings
Because it will give me and endless sting

near ma heart making me suffocate
this rage or hate
of being alive
making me wanna drive

nonstop to a road that ends in death
taking away my thoughts and my breath
just to 4get those feelings that made me feel good at a point in time
but know has me creating these depressing and suicidal rhyme

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  • 15 years ago

    by Aish

    Really good! Very open and shows some real strong emotion.

    A couple of typo's and words which could be changed around but i wont go into all that.

    "two people flirting like there was no tomorrow
    i don't believe in love at first sight, though
    with u i was caught instantly without doubt
    i felt like i was knocked out"

    ^^ i can really relate to this part of the poem.

    "nonstop to a road that ends in death
    taking away my thoughts and my breath
    just to 4get those feelings that made me feel good at a point in time
    but know has me creating these depressing and suicidal rhyme"
    ^^think you might have put a few too many words in thesecond last line-but thats ok. it should also be "now" not "know" in the last line. This stanza is my favourite though. It is a great supportive finish.

    I love poems where people write openly about their emotions. This one is carried by that element.

    5/5, Aish
    xx

  • 15 years ago

    by The Queen

    Another cool write..it reminded me of mario's song..I dun wanna know..lolz..

    Excellent..

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