We are only dust (my 1st Senryu/haiku)

by Goodbye   Jul 14, 2008


Just a grain of sand,
a little dust on his hand
is this world to God.

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This is my first Senryu (haiku). I thank Miss Take for letting me know about haiku and for checking out my mistakes. I thank Lone Warrior to letting me know actually this is not a haiku, it is Senryu. I am not sure about the title, if I figure out better I will change it. :)

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  • 15 years ago

    by WaitAutumn

    I don't have the words..
    except, you're right..

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    It is truely amazing when you think of it....the world within a grain of sand. We could all exsist on that grain, upon his palm, beneath his inspection. I wonder whether he would be pleased?? Now that is a topic for another poem/haiku, maybe?

    Well done

    Michael

  • 15 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Check this out for your answer.
    http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/haiku/haiku.html.
    I think you did good for a first go.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This senryu stands out because in has depth
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by smiley

    I give it 4 need littile more work tho

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