Death embrace(senryu)

by Goodbye   Jul 27, 2008


Left body alone
One night my soul did not come
Stayed too long in dreams

Stayed there to hold you
Sprinkling kisses around
Stayed forever with you

Wandering and lost
Went to embrace you again
Final fatal kiss

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I was inspired by the senryu of Karan and then I decided to write on senryu. Thanks for your advise Valet Every Wish. The result is better like this.. :)

Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Mary Daphne

    ...nice....terrific

  • 17 years ago

    by HillaryNicole

    Um love the flow and choice of words keep doing what your doing

  • 17 years ago

    by Aryaan

    'Wandering and lost
    Went to embrace you again
    Final fatal kiss'

    i loved this stanza. this one is so deep and melancholic. amazing poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sourav

    Very good work... Lines are very good... to me that's most important aspect of any kind of petry. Very well written. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    This is a different style of writing ...It was nice...
    U always surprize me with new stuff...This makes ur poems unique and makes u the best writer ever..
    I wish ya good luck ..
    Plz take care..

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