The Urge ((is oh so strong))

As requested (:

I can feel it
feel the urge so strong
and i know
i know it wont be long
^^
I like the way you repeat the word 'feel', it compounds its meaning. I also like the hanging suspence with the last line 'it won't be long'

until
until i just give in
to feel
the blade across my skin
^^
Again you repeat 'until' it lends a kind of musical beat to this piece (:

so much
i want it oh so much
to feel
just to feel the touch
^^
This is really gathering momentum. The way you use short lines and the repetiveness is great!

oh God
God please help me through
i can't
get through this without You
^^
A plea to a saviour, but there is doubt in this, doubt wheather help is diserved...again great mystery!

save me
please save me from this trap
in Your strength
i know i'll never snap
^^
A trap, but one that is laid with bait, a tempting bait, a bait that want you to reach out and steal it so it can steal you! You leave the reader in limbo, will your saviour give you the strength you need to resist the devils bait?? If we have faith we can succeed!!

Well done, I liked this alot

Michael

Descriptive, but it hangs at the end a little bit. I like it though :)

That is really good! plz jus keep praying ok and god will help you i promise! u did an excellent job like always! :-)