Broken Shards Of A Lost Soul

by eNiGmAtIc pReY   Aug 22, 2008


A forsaken, scathed soul
Heart in rupture beyond salvation
Lost from this world falling into despair
Just waiting for herself be ensnared.

Hid behind a deceitful facade
Became a living masquerade.
The sole source of shame,
Unworthy to anyone's name.

Trying to keep up with this charade
Pretended she was never afraid.
Sadly, loneliness turned to stabs of pain
A feeling that can no longer be feigned.

Sick from those dulcet words of lies
From people's serpentine mouths
Slowly making the poor soul shatter,
Leaving those shards scattered.

Pawns of hell started to move
Doing their work: shards to be removed.
The lost soul now no longer exists.
Someone who would never be reminisced.

Look, how that pitiful soul ended up!
Nobody was there to make it stop.
Left her be in tranquil solitude
With hatred forever tattooed.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Topaz

    By far your best poem 5/5 worthy compared to anybodys. But these are the poems that draw my attention but I still think its 5/5 worthy The ryhmes and vocabulary put together is something rare to find 5/5 The flow ALMOST perfect but flow is something thats hard to find 4/5 and the Emotinal impact6/5 ====5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by dante

    The poem itself is really good, work on the flow a bit and you could make the good incredible

  • 11 years ago

    by Eminent Bard

    Wow...you are definitely sooooooo magaling!! ever!!! hahaha..idol talaga kita bridget.. ^o^ kahit na hindi ko masyadong naiintindihan ang mga poems mo(kelangan ko pa kasi tingnan sa dictionary e!),i really appreciate your skills in writing.. the best!! no one compares.. sobra...

  • 11 years ago

    by Brad Quammen

    This poem was beautifully written. I could really feel every word. My fav. part was-

    "Sick from those dulcet words of lies
    From people's serpentine mouths
    Slowly making the poor soul shatter,
    Leaving those shards scattered."

    For lack of a better word it was brilliant. You have talent indeed. You got my vote 5/5 definately.

  • 11 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    I'd go as far as to say this is mature beyond your years. I would also drop the "be" from the last line. Otherwise this is admirable!