A Tear Among the Dancers in the Rain

by WaitAutumn   Aug 29, 2008


Drawing upon her body
Her last forgotten dreams
Caressing herself into a velvety death

A razor as edged as her faith
The key to lock her heart away
A rush of bliss as she pulls back

Her steps leave a crimson trail
Her wrists pouring the memory of life
A smile apon her lips, still red

Notes of despair being erased
Notes of hope being written
Listening as she waits

A blacken angel begining her fall
Her unwanted love damped by hate
She abandoned her life

To become
A tear among the dancers in the rain

-never believed in forever-

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  • 15 years ago

    by Mishka

    ...a tear amoung the dancers in the rain.. wow...... powerful.
    sweetheart.... i hope you're ok.
    i thought i would check out your work.
    just... amazing stuff.
    you write so welll.
    keep writing...
    but plz...
    keep yourself healthy, too.

    Love, Mishka. :) 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    Ur poem touched me...It brought a tear in my eye...

    Notes of despair being erased
    Notes of hope being written
    Listening as she waits

    Ur choice of ur words is so amazing...The imagery captivates the readers...besides that the flow is good..

    A blacken angel beginning her fall
    Her unwanted love damped by hate
    She abandoned her life

    What a dark state!!....I'm so impressed...This part rocked me inside especially She abandoned her life..

    Awesome job,plz keep it up...

  • 15 years ago

    by Searching for Guidance

    Wow this is intense and very deep. nicely written. defineitly sad and evoked many emotions, but i absoulutely loved your last stanza and how it ties back to the title. thanks for sharing :)

  • 15 years ago

    by unknown

    Cool.. The title was captivating,, :]
    The poem was nicely written, with some great words.. Mysterious yet beautiful..
    Keep on writing.. :]
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by MyMuse

    Oh my!! That took my breath away...i am abit crying also!! You did an amazing job on this piece :D But you kno I feel like this when im out there but somehow I keep on going. But I could keep reading this piece over and over again but somehow i die in tears, lol. But i really enjoyed this. Every stanza is a chapter to a book.

    Keep it up!!!!

    CourtneyxHolland

    5/5!!! I WISH MORE BUT YA!!!!

    xx