It's little repetitive... but I liked the emotions. Nice write.

I definitely understand and relate to the meaning behind this poem. I enjoyed the structure, use of language and how it repeats, giving it a good flow, and it really drills the idea of whats happening in. 5/5

Wow ii really lyked it.
ii can relate ta it alot.
5/5

A lot of repetition, but it turned out okay I guess. I can't answer your question though, sorry. Interesting idea.

Maybe it's that everyone feels like this at some point, but there are so many poems just like this. Still, your effort is appreciated. :)

BTW, thanks for your comment.
It was about my first wake, and really seeing death for the first time, since you didn't get it.

This is a good poem. There were a few errors, so make sure to look over your work before you submit it.

Simple kind of thoughts and that was so true! the message was totally great.. keep it up 5/5

This is such a simple poem... but it was written from the heart.. if only you described how u feel more, it'd be such a heartfelt poem..
i hav a suggestion..
"Heartbreaking... this is just so hard for me;"
make it like this so it'll be emotional as readers read it..
there's some grammar mistakes.. i don't kno if i shud point that out.. but yea u shud proof read ur work..
alryt kababayan.. that's all =]

Good poem. I liked it overall but it could have held more emotion. The flow was good. And the concept was decent. Good write!

This poem brought tears to my eyes.... it's just .. so... it's exactly how I feel.. the questions continue to come but... no asnwer in return :[

beautifully done, 5/5

I don't know about this one.. It seems like there are too many questions being asked. Granted they are all pretty much the same question, but I didn't like reading it over and over again.

"Why cant we have each other?
If we both beat the same feelings,
Can somebody tell me the reasons why?"

^I don't like the first and second lines there because it's like your asking the same question in one stanza. It wouldn't be all that problematic if the stanza were longer, but a stanza made of three lines that asks the same question in two lines seems to be lacking, especially for a first stanza.

"If we both beat the same feelings,"

^I didn't like the word 'beat' in there. Maybe trading it for a different word would sound better, like 'share' or something.

"Why cant we be? If we misses each other,"

^'Misses' should be changed to 'miss'.

The topic wasn't anything new, but you made a good effort. I hope my comment was not offensive in any way.

My honest critique: 3/5

If we misses each other,

^Misses should be miss

Okay, well first of all you repeated
yourself way too many times.. That
really kinda ruins the poem. The flow
was shaky and had problems getting
the worlds out at times becuase it didn't
match. Quite a bit of mistakes this poem
could really use some work. And usually
if you were going to write a clice there could
have been some originality. but keep up
the good work i am familiar with your
work and i know you could do better because
I happen to be a fan of your work. Well
try again. Sorry i don't mean to be mean but
just trying to help you out that's all don't take
it personally.
<3tay
4/5

I think most people already pointed out the few mistakes that I saw so I don't need to bring those up again. I thought the poem was written well with the exception of those couple spelling mistakes which can easily be fixed. I can relate to the love and emotion in the poem and I ask myself the same questions sometimes...Excellent job 5/5 GG23

Yeah thanks im going to change now.. i know that topic is very common but i just wrote based on my experience and what i have been through this time, once again thanks i really appreciate alot..

I wouldn't change a thing other than any spelling or grammar, if it's how you feel that's all that's important. The poem speaks to me as the same question I and millions of others throughout time have asked. Someone is always left asking why in these type of breakups.

I like this poem, I can really relate! I like the repition and the flow, the word choice could improve a little, but otherwise i think it's really great. I really really like the 3rd stanza, if you add a coma after Heartbreaking or took "this" out from after Heartbreaking, it would be perfect. Wonderful job! 5/5